She's not coming back. I know this now. And I can't even write. This will change, but it's most maddening at the moment. I need to stop thinking so much, or at the very least acquire some vices. The guy she's with now drinks 40's like they're Diet Cokes. Sounds good to me. What the hell.
Re. the 'Britney' controversy: Well of course she's a babe. And of course she'll end up in Playboy sooner or later. Paul is just telling the truth. I'm never giving up my ideals, but reality is no longer a stranger to me...
Well lets add up the votes now.
Silent - 1
Paul, Chris and Alexander - 3
We're winning.
Chris ~ "The Grave Yard" has a very elemental but captivating rhythm and voice. I enjoyed it for its engaging simplicity.
Terry ~
"Dead calm has fallen
And the vodka is burning
And God my head is filled and churning"
(In your "I Am Shiva"
these lines kept my eyes returning)
~ Claire
laurel-
thank you for the kind words
claire-
thank YOU for the thoughtful commentary...
Gala-
I will settle for a pen that writes consistent poetry, unless a mage's staff comes equipped with one... <Hugs> again, hon. The poem about your Aunt's kitchen brought so many memories of my own flooding back ('twas my grandfather who taught me by example so much about how to take care of the ones you love). Thank you for that.
I've not been feeling particularly creative, as nearly all my energies are being consumed by work (going in on a Sunday even, soon - ugh). Brings to mind portions of "Martin Eden," a semi-biographical novel by Jack London. A decent read for aspiring writers... Writing can be a quest of Quixotic proportions, but we do it because that's who we are...
k
Paul..Joke? Win? Vote? Truth? Britney Spears is not even on this board and you dis her that way. You my man are the joke and you have won nothing but shame and I vote that you are a very lonely miserable person who gets his rocks off slammin other people and assumes celebrities are without human emotion and just fair game to be picked to pieces and that is the truth.
Terry ~ I felt an allure in "Walking" right from the beginning with your opening two lines describing the pull of the "pallid" moon. A lovely universal/introspective piece.
Chris W. ~ "Caress My Sullen Heart" strongly stung recognition into my own as I read. What an interesting viewpoint: "I squint upon any hint of colorful daylight."
Hank Christian ~ "Soul Shaping" finely forges its own poetic formation...wonderfully expressed.
J.S. ~ I'm glad you liked "Junction" enough to share...I can certainly see why. I see a unique ability for expression in your words.
~ Claire
Claire~ Thank you for the kind comments. And I appreciate the specific manner you do comment. I sorta wish the critiques here would include the bad too...those specifics help alot.
terry
Good Morning Blenderites...
Ok, I amnow catching up on the new stuff...although I still have nothing to submit...sheesh...inspiration all around, and I still can't write a decent line
Terry--'Crimson Flows'..Very good..I was actually toying with something along those lines...(it was a teensy bit hard to read though)...and 'the heart says hush'..well...sheesh, why couldn't you have written that like a month ago?? luv you man!
Claire--'Scrabble By Moonlight'..I love the visual that comes to mind...well written, as all of yours are
Crystevin--"admission'--if more people could just admit it...there might not be so many lonely people in the world..
Angel--Desire...WoW...yummy...and 'Scales of Justice'..outstanding...I've had that feeling before
sinneD--'For You' I love...excellent
Hank--you just turn a girl's heart to mush...keep up the French...and the awesome words that you write...~sigh~
Lydia--you may not like 'Moving on' but I think you did a fine job with it.
Kevin--'Casting Lots'I like the last part the best...and I'd rather have your kind of writer's block any day over mine.
Paul--'Swan Song'very good, hon...(you are a poet you know)
If I left anyone out, I'm sorry. My head is still a little cloudy from yesterday's fun.
talk to you later lovebugs!
Paul! Where have you been? I miss hearing from you....
Beth
i love you juan jose but i love you seba
i don't kow
Kurtis Gomez (Zero #1)- Love your recent submissions.
-Jenna-
(groan) is it Monday already?
heya all... Had a busy busy weekend... I've completed moving my homepage from geocities to my ISP site at paradise ... so if anyone has a few spare moment.....please check it out... and if you notice ANY broken links or anything that looks screwy please let me know.... http://homepages.paradise.net.nz/~deevaa/
I've still got a few links to put on.... Terry, Gala, Chris W... please please please? may I?
dee
Wow- I am feeling better than I have in days...
Got to give MUCHOS thanks to HMS for her book recommendation and for all the women here- pick up "The Girl's Guide to Hunting and Fishing" Irresistable. Reading it was like sitting down with my best friend for gossip.
AND then I came to read all the new subs and WOW.
* Gala * "Skinned Knees of the Heart." Yup. Two thumbs up and SUCH a good comparison.
* Angel * "Desire"...very nice snapshot...probably an even better moment *grin*
* Terry * "Crimson Flows" (I think...) Loved it.
* Claire * "Scrabble"
* Jill * "Walk of Shame"...I LOVED this one. Hope to see more of ya.
* Sinned* "She"
So much good stuff right now. I have a lot in my heart going on so I am sure it will come to the paper soon...
Till Later-
Megs
Oh and Queen Deevaa-
I stopped by your site and all the links I checked were all good. LOVED some of your old poems that I had never read before ("Confusion"- Wow) and TKs lil corner was adorable.
Nikki ~ Your yearning in "Missing" is so acutely portrayed.
Bader Al-Salim ~ In "Yes I Can" I like "heart neighbor."
MaD ~ "To think of death and not let it be tragic" ...such a universal, unanswered question. Your "I Wonder" is touching, bittersweet in both curiosity and sensation.
Jennifer Heady ~ a very sad commentary, "Inside My Skin." Your endline is quite effective.
"I am dying
Piece
By
Piece,
Inside my skin."
Kevin Urenda ~ In "the road" I enjoy how you've revealed the revealing:
..."underneath all the
bluster I always
rediscover a me
I had not seen before"
Angel ~ "A Longing" walks the reader backward in time and perception to a pleasing, primative "before."
"and you touch me
like i am the wind and the fire
to be harnessed by you
but respectfully
and i oblige" ~~ intoxicating work.
KtG ~ "Desired Again" struck a far too familiar nerve with me, but am glad to have had the opportunity to read it. Nicely writ.
~ Claire
Dee--I have to agree with Megs...and TK's art is so adorable...I think he takes after mumma....and will soon be wowing the world with more!
Gala--Skinned Knees of the Heart is excellent. I had almost forgotten those days...and where is mom with her magic wand that used to make all the pain go away, anyway?
Claire--thank you for your kind words on 'Missing' I love Self Portrait...it's so poignant...I especially like the last part...'no eyes for her pageant and to none shall she show it'. thank you
sinneD--'a little love'...I love the line..'such is hope still lasting, how much or how little is all the same'..brings hope to me and my wretched heart...and 'blown' is excellent as well