Jai~ 'Light' was a very poignant and heart-breaking piece of prose. Thanks for sharing it here..
terry
(sorry about all the single posts guys, but I am reading the subs one at a time as I get time. I am behind badly, and trying to get caught up...t.)
Sarah~ 'Morning Gone' and 'Drowning' were both wonderfully written...
..."let my mind fall into darkness
where memory is not a trap waiting
for my next footfall"...
very nice indeed! and...
..."stealing away
moments of flesh
and seconds
of taste"...
wow what an image...
terry
Tara~ I said it once before, so pardon me for repeating...your writing has a very simple raw power that brings the emotions through clearly. Both your recent posts are the same. Thanks for baring so much to us.....t.
Getting behind again folks but today was my oldest son's 4th birthday so I took Friday off of work and made a whole weekend of it with him. If you had told me 10 years ago I would be one of those nutty dads that gets misty-eyed over his kids and brags on them every second of the day I would have said you were nuts.
Terry - I bet your mail box is full!!!
Gala - Your song is almost done.
Misti - The first version of your screenplay is done.
whew
Nikki~ 'Second Chances' had a ring of honesty to it that caught my mind.....
"Bring me papier-mache flowers
and watch them melt from my tears."
What a lovely poetic phrase that reaches in and grabs the old heart and squeezes it hard......
t.
Paul~ lol...you would not believe how full...but I actually spent this afternoon getting semi-caught up...I'm not really a slacker, I just do a good impression of one at times. Congrats on your son's b-day! Hope you guys spent it making good memories!
t.
Paul--congrats on your son's b-day...I knew you were doing something this weekend, but couldn't remember what!
Terry-thanks for your comments on Second Chances...I just wish I could do accent marks on my keyboard...papier-mache looks a little strange without them :)
Megs-- I tried to e-mail you, but I think you have changed your address and not told me, because the one I have doesn't work. :(
the sleep gods are not being nice to me tonight...tomorrow should be an interesting day!
later lovebugs! ~nikki
Gup--'Sleepytime Rationale' of course was nothing like I thought it was from the title...great nonetheless...'only the good ones break your heart'--something I have yet to get across to my brain..~sigh~
Paul----
Speaking as the mom of a perfectly delightful nine year old...the birthday thing gets worse. She hits two digits next year----and is over my chin in height...and I'm not petite....
I look at her and see a rare and wonderful being...and I want to protect her every owie in the known world...but if you don't allow kids to grow and learn, you stunt them. A butterfly can't be helped from a cocoon....
Desi is brilliant, bright, talented---and amazingly sweet. She goes out of her way to be kind...and as a child with a speech delay, has been put upon by other kids not a few times...but she is wonderful.
And it doesn't bother me all that she started writing poetry at age four---and mastered six forms by the time she was eight.I don't push her..but it is neat to watch. I didn't even try till I was 12........
So have a hug Paul..you old softy........
Love Gala
Nikki - How do you sleep - very well done - Also, Second Chances - reading bottom to top sorry
Hank - Art De Vous - great imagery - Dee - is very lucky - how beautifully written for the best artist.
Eric: Pool of Tears - I loved it - I don't think you should make it any longer - I liked the ending.
Guppy - I love all of your poems...
Christopher Lake - You should know ... You and Misti are very special and she is very lucky... I particulary liked the line - "Sometimes only tears are enough to express how I feel about you."
ZoE - Fade to White - wow - your writing continues to amaze me - i am always interested to see what you will say next.
A lot of subs were made over the weekend... so I am sorry for not commenting on all of them - they are all excellent - you guys really are quite gifted.
Chris ~ I understand about poems "spilling out"...some of mine do that too, quite unexpectedly. Others have to be dragged out kicking and screaming, it seems. :o) Regarding your question, I have had nothing that resembles formal training. I simply enjoy reading and writing poetry, and do so whenever I can. Thank you for your kind remarks.
Terry ~ I am pleased that you enjoyed "His Muse" so much. I thank you for letting me know.
~ Claire
My Poem:
You said you loved me
I said it too
I really meant it
but did you?
My Heart Screams Out!
You said you loved me, i said it too
I really meant it, but did you?
You gave your heart to me, I gave you mine
We held hands, all of the time
We kissed and smiled, and laughed alot
But what happened to all that?
It seems to have dissapeared, right into thin air
I looked everywhere, and still i can't find it
Should I give up, or keep trying?
I don't know, what should I do
People tell me I should just get over you
But I listened before, and that was a mistake
That all came down to two heartbreaks
NOW you say you are over me, but thats not what I see
I wish you were here right now, just holding me
Hugging and squeezing me so tight,
through-out the entire night
I would feel safe, because I would be in your arms
I miss you so much, I cry-and-cry
Why should I have to feel this way
I LOVE YOU, and will love you everyday
No matter where you are, and who you are with
You'll still be my first love,
And the first person that I have ever missed
I WILL LOVE YOU FOR ETERNITY!
your Angel
Abgel, since we share the same first name...if I may be permitted...first loves aren't really the best. That's like saying that an artist's first painting is going to be their opus....
But not a one of us here hasn't stood where you're standing...
Take care of your heart.....
So Says Gala-------
also named Lisa
Forgive me dear-------Angel.....
Terry- thank you for you compliment.
I just found this page like 2 days ago, there are some very talented writers wow!. I haven't had tiem to look at everything yet, but I intend to do so as sooon as possible.
well -- as we are talking about our kids... TK is STILL sick, taking him back to the Drs shortly, he's so cleaver I can't even trick him into taking his Meds....He's noticed that they sink in his milk so he checks the bottom of the glass or bottle before he drinks it!! (TK = toad)
Tara -- I know you where complimenting Hank.. but thanks! (I feel like I own the poem!)
Take care of your hearts.
dee
Please remove my work here.
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Thanks!
Caroline
nikki, tara, claire, gala, terry, jenna, and everybody else who has commented on my writing lately: thanks so much for the compliments...it really does make my day when i can write something that evokes emotions in other people...sooner or later i'll actually be able to write stuff that fits in the "really really happy" category...at least i hope so...cloud nine has been kinda elusive for a bit...god, i miss those feelings, and at the same time i just sit back and smile when i read about those feelings coming from other authors here...i love love
nikki---the thing about the good ones breaking your heart...i do think that's true...not saying that the not-so-good ones can't hurt it
gup
Please remove this from your archives:
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Thanks!
Caroline
Please remove this link from your archives. Thanks
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Jenna- body heat was magic
Oh Kev.........nicely done.......
Gala