Shimmergloom~~~~ Hey there. I enjoyed your recent works. It sounds like we have a lot in common. I seem to be having problems with questions, while you have more than enough answers that sometimes people just don't understand you like you would care for them too. I'm having troubles of my own as you can read in "My Own Devil" that I just submitted. If you got any probs man, I'm here for ya. Keep up the good works man.
Sincerely,
Zero #1
guppy: your originality is as exciting as it is provocative. your last two subs were incredible!
hey,...i just started submitting things to this site and i really appreciate input or constructive criticism,..after all...how can i fix it if i don't know what it is??...i'll continue to read through your poetry and i'll write more with comments later...c-ya for the present..
%me%
gala: "when the gods whisper our names to eachother"
what an incredible phrase...what an incredible image. great work!
I couldn't resist to comment about these three new submissions:
Riggs- "Poem for a Broken Man"...Very powerful ending... really good poem.
Zero #1- "Liar" ...Theres alot of that going around, isn't there?
Nikki-"Forever?" Perfect poem of something that has happened to me, yet I couldn't of ever expressed it as well as you did.
OoOo.., sorry, forgot one:
Coda-- "Questions" Is absolutely truthful to the finest degree....sooooo veryyyy truuueee :P
Stephen - In American Bandstand style I give your Song/Poem and 88 because I could dance to it! I take it you play guitar. I do drums. All we need now is bass and vocals and we've got a group.
Kiwi - I can't wait!
Paul B.: 'Accent on Love' was a charming poem. Really liked it.
Sarah: Your short but sexually sweet poems are great for conveying an image without having to be wordy or gratuitously graphic. Awesome poems!!
Paul B.: 'Accent on Love' was a charming poem. Really liked it.
Sarah: Your short but sexually sweet poems are great for conveying an image without having to be wordy or gratuitously graphic. Awesome poems!!
Sorry, forgot to add my name on that comment:)
Paul B
I can do vocals for you, all you need now is someone on bass.
optimistic p.: well, 'another one' was certainly befitting of your screen name! kinda philosophical. i liked it.
*heaving sorrowful sigh*
fine...
i guess only kevin loves me enough to help find
my "lost chlldren" (eg. old poems)...
*cheshire cat grin*
*giggle*
at least i only have to bake cookies for one person...
any whoo...
i wish to send my loving thoughts and fondest wishes for
good things to come out to both guppy & misti...
separately of course...
but i'm sure you all got that...
*warm smile*
as to the rest of you...
i am ever so happy that you all have been here
writing out peices of your hearts & lives...
it has helped me more than you might ever know
& i thank you for gracing me with these rare and
beautiful things...
*all encompassing hug*
ml
-Starr
Dee- "Caressed by the Wind" ...It blew me away (no pun intended)
Guppy- "Scared"...loved it, BUT "a very small guy" That was the sweetest thing I have EVER read! Loved the lines
"i'll write poetry on your eyelids
so you see it when you blink"
Til' Later!
-Jenna-
You say you love me
yet you lie
I don't know if your
love is true anymore.
I've heard everything
now I have to choose
whats a lye and
whats the truth.
Instead of me choosing
Why can't you?
choose me or choose to
tell the truth.
My heart will hurt
Maybe yours will too.
I doubt it though
maybe you could tell me
but please tell the truth.
I wish you were here
right by my side.
I wish you were here
holding me tight.
You know your in my dreams
I know I'm in yours too.
I wish you were here
so I could be holding onto
you.
You can see it in my eyes
It's in yours too.
We really love each other
me and you.
One too many letters
that you never read
one too many letters
I wish I hadn't sent.
We'll never talk again
avoiding the awkward moments
replaced by awkward stares
because of those one too many letters
I'll never send again.
shimmergloom
Zero#1---- Hey, thanks for the comments, I really liked Liar, it sounds like you were really feeling that. It painted a clear picture of frustration, I liked it alot.
Keep up the good work.
optimistic-pessimets---loved your work, hope you keep submitting..
Coda~ 'Questions' was a very though provoking work. I loved the line..."weighing his crevices next to his supposed bridges"...it says well what I have pondered a lot lately. Thanks.
t.
shimmergloom- I love your work,..it presents things from so many unique angles, and it sounds like it's written from someone that's felt it firsthand.....
%me%
optimistic-pessimest85
Wow...sounds to me like you are a very deep person. I think we have a lot in common. I can't wait to hear what you put on here next.
Keep writing
once again,...shimmergloom- i thought your newest poem held a lot of self-insight, and an ability to examine yourself, and an awarness of it...
%me%
hey...kevin urenda- i really liked the way you presented love in "kissing it"...it's so true,..yet so laughable..
%me%
deevaa...
i am honored to have any writing of mine coupled with your beautiful painting. thank you so much for putting that submission together. i think it, in itself, is artwork.
Many thanks to all who commented on Poem for a Broken Man
Thanks for the comments all -
Riggs - Gala sings too. We need to find a bass player pronto!