From: Zero #1<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Shimmergloom~~~~ Hey there. I enjoyed your recent works. It sounds like we have a lot in common. I seem to be having problems with questions, while you have more than enough answers that sometimes people just don't understand you like you would care for them too. I'm having troubles of my own as you can read in "My Own Devil" that I just submitted. If you got any probs man, I'm here for ya. Keep up the good works man.<BR>
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Sincerely,<BR>
Zero #1
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From: chris w.<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

guppy:  your originality is as exciting as it is provocative.  your last two subs were incredible!<BR>

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From: optimistic_pessimist85<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

hey,...i just started submitting things to this site and i really appreciate input or constructive criticism,..after all...how can i fix it if i don't know what it is??...i'll continue to read through your poetry and i'll write more with comments later...c-ya for the present..<BR>
%me%
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From: chris w.<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

gala:  "when the gods whisper our names to eachother"<BR>
what an incredible phrase...what an incredible image.  great work!
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From: Stephen [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

I couldn't resist to comment about these three new submissions:<BR>
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Riggs- "Poem for a Broken Man"...Very powerful ending... really good poem.<BR>
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Zero #1- "Liar" ...Theres alot of that going around, isn't there?<BR>
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Nikki-"Forever?" Perfect poem of something that has happened to me, yet I couldn't of ever expressed it as well as you did. <BR>
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From: Stephen<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

OoOo.., sorry, forgot one:<BR>
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Coda-- "Questions" Is absolutely truthful to the finest degree....sooooo veryyyy truuueee :P
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From: Paul B<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Stephen - In American Bandstand style I give your Song/Poem and 88 because I could dance to it!  I take it you play guitar.  I do drums.  All we need now is bass and vocals and we've got a group.<BR>
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Kiwi - I can't wait!<BR>
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Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Paul B.: 'Accent on Love' was a charming poem.  Really liked it.<BR>
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Sarah: Your short but sexually sweet poems are great for conveying an image without having to be wordy or gratuitously graphic.  Awesome poems!!
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From: Chris W.<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Paul B.: 'Accent on Love' was a charming poem.  Really liked it.<BR>
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Sarah: Your short but sexually sweet poems are great for conveying an image without having to be wordy or gratuitously graphic.  Awesome poems!!<BR>
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Sorry, forgot to add my name on that comment:)
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From: Riggs<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Paul B<BR>
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I can do vocals for you, all you need now is someone on bass.<BR>
<BR>

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From: chris w.<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

optimistic p.: well, 'another one' was certainly befitting of your screen name!  kinda philosophical.  i liked it.<BR>

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From: Starr<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

*heaving sorrowful sigh*<BR>
fine...<BR>
i guess only kevin loves me enough to help find<BR>
my "lost chlldren" (eg. old poems)...<BR>
*cheshire cat grin*<BR>
*giggle*<BR>
at least i only have to bake cookies for one person...<BR>
any whoo...<BR>
i wish to send my loving thoughts and fondest wishes for<BR>
good things to come out to both guppy & misti...<BR>
separately of course...<BR>
but i'm sure you all got that...<BR>
*warm smile*<BR>
as to the rest of you...<BR>
i am ever so happy that you all have been here <BR>
writing out peices of your hearts & lives...<BR>
it has helped me more than you might ever know<BR>
& i thank you for gracing me with these rare and<BR>
beautiful things...<BR>
*all encompassing hug*<BR>
<BR>
ml<BR>
-Starr
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From: Jenna Holland ([email-masked])<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Dee- "Caressed by the Wind" ...It blew me away (no pun intended)<BR>
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Guppy- "Scared"...loved it, BUT "a very small guy" That was the sweetest thing I have EVER read! Loved the lines <BR>
"i'll write poetry on your eyelids<BR>
so you see it when you blink" <BR>
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Til' Later!<BR>
-Jenna-<BR>
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From: Anna H   [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

You say you love me<BR>
yet you lie<BR>
I don't know if your<BR>
love is true anymore.<BR>
<BR>
I've heard everything<BR>
now I have to choose<BR>
whats a lye and<BR>
whats the truth.<BR>
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Instead of me choosing<BR>
Why can't you?<BR>
choose me or choose to<BR>
tell the truth.<BR>
<BR>
My heart will hurt<BR>
Maybe yours will too.<BR>
I doubt it though<BR>
maybe you could tell me<BR>
but please tell the truth.
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From: Anna H [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

I wish you were here<BR>
right by my side.<BR>
I wish you were here<BR>
holding me tight.<BR>
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You know your in my dreams<BR>
I know I'm in yours too.<BR>
I wish you were here <BR>
so I could be holding onto <BR>
you.<BR>
<BR>
You can see it in my eyes<BR>
It's in yours too.<BR>
We really love each other<BR>
me and you.
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From: Anna H [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

One too many letters<BR>
that you never read<BR>
one too many letters<BR>
I wish I hadn't sent.<BR>
<BR>
We'll never talk again<BR>
avoiding the awkward moments<BR>
replaced by awkward stares<BR>
because of those one too many letters<BR>
I'll never send again.
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Date: 20 July 2000<P>

shimmergloom  <BR>
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Zero#1---- Hey, thanks for the comments, I really liked Liar, it sounds like you were really feeling that. It painted a clear picture of frustration, I liked it alot.<BR>
Keep up the good work.<BR>
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optimistic-pessimets---loved your work, hope you keep submitting..
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From: terry<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Coda~ 'Questions' was a very though provoking work. I loved the line..."weighing his crevices next to his supposed bridges"...it says well what I have pondered a lot lately. Thanks.<BR>
t.<BR>

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From: optimistic_pessimist85<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

shimmergloom- I love your work,..it presents things from so many unique angles, and it sounds like it's written from someone that's felt it firsthand.....<BR>
%me%
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From: shimmergloom<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

optimistic-pessimest85<BR>
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Wow...sounds to me like you are a very deep person. I think we have a lot in common. I can't wait to hear what you put on here next.<BR>
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Keep writing<BR>

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From: optimistic_pessimist85<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

once again,...shimmergloom- i thought your newest poem held a lot of self-insight, and an ability to examine yourself, and an awarness of it...<BR>
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%me%
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From: optimistic_pessimist85<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

hey...kevin urenda- i really liked the way you presented love in "kissing it"...it's so true,..yet so laughable..<BR>
%me%
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From: chris w.<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

deevaa...<BR>
i am honored to have any writing of mine coupled with your beautiful painting.  thank you so much for putting that submission together.  i think it, in itself, is artwork.<BR>

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From: Riggs<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Many thanks to all who commented on Poem for a Broken Man
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From: Paul B<BR>
Date: 20 July 2000<P>

Thanks for the comments all -<BR>
Riggs - Gala sings too.  We need to find a bass player pronto!
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