Chris W.
Thanks for the comment on "I'll have a martini please." It's always easier to write something you are actually experiencing. I'm going through a difficult time right now. I'm not really sure what's going on, but I realize that drinking martinis is not the answer...all they do is give me one hell of a headache in the morning.
Again, I appreciate your comment.
Regards,
Dawn
Chris W.~ 'A Clean Spot' was very captivating to the imagination.
...And I think narrative verse suits your style of writing very well! After re-reading I disagree with the comment about lips emitting 'empathy'. Given that you used 'emits' in plural form, it refers back to 'face' as the intended reference. And I have seen many faces show empathy with a single glance and smile. And I also loved the metaphor inherenent in the title, although that point was more valid. It did at first make me think of a carpet cleaner..lol. Very Good work, and is is part of something longer?
terry
Terry, Michael and Zoe~
thanks for the comments on *A Ring of Truth*!
...I never want to sugarcoat what I have with Chris, hence *Nonlinear Transcript #2*...last night we had our worst fight ever and I really thought I would be flying home to Texas today. I talked to my brother on the phone last night and I told him something I have always believed...there are never just two people in a relationship. Chris and I are both 27 years old and we both have a lot of issues. For all our faults and vices, we recognize the truth and worth of our love and we don't take a single day for granted. I've told Chris from the very beginning that it is very important to me to write about our relationship with complete honesty. I'm grateful he's strong enough to agree with me.
Michael...
Thank you for sharing your latest. I enjoyed reading it.
oops...forgot you had submitted another poem!
I enjoyed reading *Tears* and *Dolphins*!
terry and elizabeth: thank you so much for your comments!!!! i really appreciate any compliment or criticism. true, with the empathy part, i was referring to the face, but i can easily make that clearer. and as far as the metaphor goes...i was unsure of it when i wrote it. i didn't know if it would work or not. i was trying to think of something non-romantic that my character would think in reference to the woman that would be opposed to his dirty world. i thought of a clean spot on a dirty carpet, but it seemed flimsy. so i'll have to work on that.
again, thank you for your feedback.
and to all others: thanks for your comments on anything i've written recently!
oh and terry: it is a small part of something bigger. i'm expanding it into a short story, although i don't have a fully functioning plot yet, just kind of a dramatic situation. but i'm working on it.
thank you to all opf those who so graciously and warm heartedly replied to my ditress signal...
the situation is not yet over...
we are still in a huge bind...
but knowing that at barest minimum i have the support of wonderful folk like you, i am a very lucky woman...
thank you again...
*warm smile*
*group hug*
*open tray of cookies*
*huge carafe of tea*
ml
-e
ZoE!
Your poems consistently blow me away. *Spine Shakes* is incredible.
Hey guys- just back from a packed weekend to Cleveland and downstate Ohio for a friend's wedding. Had the nicest dinner over at an old English Teacher's.....
Anyway, posting utterly anonymously to the Blender Board is really stupid, since it's trivial to pick a new alias and use it. If someone doesn't fill in the blank, it's impossible to tell one shyguy from another.
Misti~ "ring of truth" was really great... I loved it. Your poems are always so fun to read... they are so real, and honest and beautiful! Thank's! :-)
guppy: zen and the art of panic attacks was a riot! hilarious! just what i needed to read in the middle of a long work day.
Guppy...
I'm still rolling on the floor!!!! Zen and the art of panic attacks was too damn funny!! And, ironically, I've been planning Chinese for dinner all day!
Dawn
=o)
I have several really amusing suggestions for the folks at AOL.......but most are illegal in this state......
If you are used to hearing from me, please send an email.........every damned addy I have got blown off last night........
Lonely and desolate..............
Gala The Luddite
Thank you so much MiStI :) and welcome back KiRk :O
-ZoE
I love your site but i wish that you would put more things in there for teens.Also maybe some poems to do with anger and hate twords an ex????
Hey everyone!
Well I haven't had much time to read anything recent but I'm trying. But two poems caught my eye....
***Zero #1*** Well I loved "The Beautiful Her". I was also imaganing who the one your falling for is?!
***Micheal*** I loved "Tears". It was great! :)
Always
The Frosted One
deevaa: the art and the words are really beautiful.
zoe: seems every time i comment, i do nothing but praise you, and so i'm afraid my compliments may lose their impact. but, your poetry is just...awe-inspiring. there's this raw imagery that is powerful as hell.
Oh my!! Apparently we aren't allowed to go away for the weekend, too much homework when we return!! Spent the most
WONDERFUL weekend with the boyfriend. I'm off to read (since I'm not inspired yet to write) & I'll be back for the post-game wrap up in a bit!
heya all --
(buckle your seat belt this maybe a bumpy ride)
Just been perusing the new subs for some 'truly spectacular' stuff that I as a regular have missed off my list of comments....(by the way -- when did it become MY job to comment on EVERYthing wonderful? why isn't the anonymous one commenting on the stuff they like? WHY leave it up to ME?? OBVIOUSLY they don't like the same stuff I do ... and OBVIOUSLY I'm going to keep overlooking this spectacular stuff, in my rush to pat the other regulars on the back -- so here goes, my one eyed back patting session (done in a manner which won't even approach being cogent).....
(giggling) giggling is always a good start.....
Jack -- 'tides' - I was really pulled in by the first few lines... they are lovely.
Slug -- 'words on pages' I thought your word play was brilliant, esp liked --
"And I seem to have misplaced my sense of wow...
But no matter, the replacement is adequate
Or adequate is as adequate does."
guppy -- handsome, you are constantly amazing. 'lecture from a blank page' great rhythm, beautiful flow -- stunning! (the last stanza is WONDERFUL)
"derelict conversations
fueled and furtive
past the prime and fit to fall"
Also loved 'idiot wind' (thankyou for sharing) and also 'Zen and the art....' I'm so damn thrilled I can call you my friend, you have talent to spare (send some my way)
Forrest Adams -- 'Broken Wings' had a really lovely rhythm
Misti -- 'Nonlinear Transcript #2' was very raw... and the I'm gonna try and remember the advice from that book.... (smiles) number 3... doing something nice when all you really want to do is kill..... brilliant!!
Chris W... I agree with Terry, when you let go and 'flow' you do the most amazing work...
and lastly
Starr -- you seem to be the master of short little snippets of life... 'drinking' really caught my eye.... mmmm.... very nice.
Take care of your hearts
dee
PS
Chris W... wow... thankyou, If you (or anyone else) want to try to tell the tale behind that face... feel free .... she seems to have something that needs capturing....
Done reading, all good, few jumped out @ me:
Guppy: "Zen and the art of panic attacks" was hysterical! By the way, that's why I order the almond cookies, they never let me down
Brad: All I can say is OTIS...OTIS..OTIS!!! There will never be another. God, I love that man. Great choices!
Deeva: Another beauty in "Beauty Sleeps" Girl, if I only had an ounce of your talent ;)
Starr: "Bound"...gorgeous
Misti: "Frankenkiss"...WOW, too good for words
That's all for now, hopefully a splinter of creativity will pop up later...I'm just so damned tired right now! Take care all =)
Chris W.
"Dishes" ~ I Love it!! My man is due here in about 15 minutes, so I think I'll go do some dishes for his arrival...HA!
Dawn
:o)
Chris W -- damn... thats ONE hot piece of erotica.... ohhhhhh my.... now how am I meant to concentrate on my work now.
I have a theory about dishes... its a pretty intimate thing to do-- if you think about it, you only ever do dishes with someone you are completely comfortable with -- my ex and I used to have the best talks over the dishes.
dee
Zero--*The Beautiful Her*--It's a great felling to fall in love. I know that it makes people happy and i know that it will make you feel the same. Once again your work is great.
" --*Food*-- now there is a poem!! i never thought of food that way, but it makes total since.
Keep up the great work!!
Kare Bare
Oh Chris----
You did such a lovely job with the dishes.....now what can you come up with for laundry?
Gala......naughty as ever.......