From: terry<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Thanks Michael...I too admire guppy and many others here for the natural rhythm they have. Something i sorely lack most of the time.<BR>
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t.
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From: kevin lopez<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

poem<BR>
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roses are black pickles are green i like your legs and what in between!
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From: Galadrial<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

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Mr. Lopez....<BR>
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            Keep the day job...and remember this line---it's key to your future..."You want fries with that?"<BR>
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                                               Gala
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From: Elaina <BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

I'm drowning do you ever wish there was an explaintion to why you pressed to submit button???? OH! That's what I'm thinking right now, I'm scared out of my mind, words unsaid is a bomb waiting to be dropped...right, it's sometimes better to say too much than nothing at all...right?  Sorry I'm not myself at this moment, but it seems everyone says that when they really write form the heart...right??<BR>
 xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: Elaina<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Ok, I got it, my last poem 'My Addiction' say how I feel now, how I felt then and how I never want to feel.  It's like a comedy, tragedy and suspense all rolled into one!?<BR>
xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: Stephen<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

I have been taking a great big step in life's shitbucket lately, so I couldn't really keep up with everyone's work. I frankly dislike the idea of reading 500+ poems, so could some of you devoted lovely poets out there who bother to read this boardy-thingy pass me a response including some of your best works from the last 2-3 months? I would really appreciate it.<BR>
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One poem I did take a glance at (because it was added after my recent submission) and liked a lot, was Elaina's "My Addiction"<BR>
Something like that could so easily be used as song lyrics.. Rock on :-)<BR>

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From: Michael (move)<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Terry ~ I love the rhythm of "Untitled". 
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From: gary  [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Angel,<BR>
      Just because you wrote something about my poem means I already like you. Please understand that I am not promoting another site but if you want to make $ with your work try http://www.poetry.com/bash/index.html for more info. As I am in another country I miss out on Most of the USA contests. But if for no other reason, enjoy<BR>
gary  
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From: Angel<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Gary,*GREAT BIG SMILE* thanks and I will check your site out. But, I must say right at the moment I am making big bucks on Ebay selling worthless junk and cannot see topping those profits by selling my words;) (i am a painting in progress)But, I am sure you have sparked some interest here. I hope you continue to share your works here, though Kirk doesn't pay much...hehehe...we have a whole lot of people that just love to read. <BR>
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Terry, thank you for that wonderful critique...it didn't hurt a bit! :)  I do see where your experience with satin would bring forth laughter...I giggled at the mere thought of what you were thinking:) And you hit the nail on the head about 'desire'...that is probably the crux of the poem...though, more about the ROOT of then the OBJECT of desire. I can also see where some men may even emit nervous laughter at the reversal of roles in this poem which was not intended to be taken literally, though it could be interesting;) But how nice it would be to experience desire from another's vantage point.
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From: Elaina<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Stephen~ Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it, and hey you write the music I'll sell you the lyrics (hahha).<BR>
<BR>
xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: Kirk, Blender-Keeper<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Angela:<BR>
If you got to http://loveblender.com/ you should see a link to the new Digest... you might have to hit reload or something?  Or you could go straight to http://www.loveblender.com/2001january/ .<BR>
<BR>
Looks like a friend or friends of Mr. Analcakes have returned.  I'll try to keep an eye out, if the postings become to space consuming or obnoxious I'll start deleting or segregating them.  
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From: scqueen<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

michael (commentary)~ thanks! your comments on 'swaping spit' were exactly how i felt whe i wrote it. glad the reader could feel it also :-)<BR>
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oh dee ~ your 'untitled' deserves a title! loved it...<BR>
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From: Angel<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Ok, I'm gonna get onto Dee and Terry! If there is one thing I cannot stand more than horridly repeated misspellings in a work, it is an UNTITLED poem!!! A poem deserves a title, even a bad one! A poem without a title is like a person without a face (oooops, bad analogy beings Dee paints distorted faces...hehehe) *SMILE* One reason I do not like to see a poem go untitled is that it makes it rather hard to look up later. And the last two poems of Dee and Terry are simply wonderful and if I file them I will have to name them myself:) Oh, am I really peeved at you TWO! Of course this is only my opinion and we all know what are opinions are like;) And I do believe I may have Untitled one or two, but usually I just rely on Kevin or other friends to title them for me. *ducking my head and running out now before the deluge*smile*
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From: me aka niki<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

 2 terry~ I'm glad you liked "splendor"<BR>
And thx for your advice =)<BR>

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From: sarah [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

this place has helped me keep my sanity the past couple days.....the computer system at work isn't working so its incredibly frustrating not being able to do my job...especially when you have a deadline!<BR>
<BR>
but i come here then and i feel nice and calm....<BR>
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wow, i wrote virginia rain on my lunch break yesterday, i'm glad you enjoy it as much you have :)<BR>
<BR>
sarah
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From: Elaina <BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

me aka niki~ The whole package...well done, I know exactly how you feel.<BR>
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Ali~ Where are you, are you still sick?  Get better soon I miss you!!!!<BR>
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xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: deevaa<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

angel -- feel free to suggest ANY name you want. (grin) and seeing that I used the name 'untitled' before Terry did this month, I think I've got first dibs.... 
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From: deevaa<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

I've been painting again.... you know I've not been at the easel since mid-september and it is VERY hard to get my flow back again. I'm sure my muse is in there, she just doesn't want to play nice. <BR>
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Anyways, I was reading a web-log several nights back, and the person had posted a 'screen shot' from a movie they where filming, and it reminded me of a work I'd done to go with a prose piece by Kevin (PlugHole)... this work is more like my earlier stuff (1998-99 ) if you are interested check it out and let me know what you think.... http://www.geocities.com/davenaa/love-in-peace.jpg
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From: Galadrial<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

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<BR>
Oh my goodness...<BR>
<BR>
                  It's truly poor form to toot your own horn...but I really am dancing with excitement, so too bad!<BR>
I've recieved word from the editor of Poetry Webring (which is currently featuring work by Our own Mr. Leonard  (terry)<BR>
that he will be featuring some of my Ridge poems in his Valentine issue...he suggested my work to his wife, who had another site called Lingerings, and she has asked to run a LONG epic poem I penned a year ago called Cassandra Speaks in her March zine...in addition, she's also asked for Galadrial's Garden to join The Words Of A Woman webring...<BR>
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Man...I am seriously shocked about all this...remember please, that with 27 YEARS of writing behind me, I only entered a poetry contest for the first time this Fall. And I am told that the Hobbits are planning to redo some "small details" in the Garden...That's Hobbit for complete overhaul...<BR>
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Well, will keep you all posted---and will be inviting some folks to freshen the well in the guest garden too!<BR>
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Gala, dancing, leaping, AND HUGGING HERSELF...<BR>
<BR>
And guys? Thanks for all the support...without you,I am a mere elf with attitude.  Kirk, Dee, Kev, Terry---THANK YOU!
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From: [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Hey SC honey?<BR>
Can you please drop me an email?<BR>
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                                Gala
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From: [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

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Slug---next time you pass through, drop me a line please?<BR>
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                                         Gala<BR>

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From: Ali<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Elaina~ Hey, I'm still kinda sick, but I'm doing better...I love, absolutely loved 'my addiction'...great job...love it...you write wonderfully. =)<BR>
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Terry~ 'Silence Rules the Night' I love it...and 'A Dylan Day' was awesome.<BR>
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Niki~ 'Once and Again'...I really love it...all your work has been great...I haven't had so much time to comment, 'cause I've been sick...but, good stuff, dearie.<BR>
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Everyone is writing great...I'm always amazed at the amount of talent in one place...WOW...Great stuff, everybody.<BR>
         Love and Sunlight, Ali
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From: David Rosema  ccaallmm @aol. com<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

LAUGHABLE LAUGHS<BR>
<BR>
Bird shit and jelly rhyms<BR>
Critics abound with sunshine<BR>
For only time can align these useless thoughts<BR>
<BR>
To share with compassion the lesson<BR>
of a thousand lifetimes<BR>
SEEMS TO ME THE BEST OF THE BEST :)<BR>
<BR>
In Conclusion: If you write in the middle of the night<BR>
Its alright, Its alright<BR>
Just for tonight<BR>
No matter to flatter the mad hatter and such<BR>
Its ok and time for lunch<BR>
<BR>

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From: me aka niki<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

 2 Ali~ Thx<BR>
And hope you get beter soon!
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From: me aka niki<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

 2 Akash~ I liked your last 2 poems<BR>
They were gr8 =)
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From: B.K. (with red face)<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Ok: Should read; When Life gives you lemons in Sampler of life. I hate it when I do that...LOL<BR>
<BR>
bk
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From: Toklas [email-masked]<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Happy New Year everyone!<BR>
<BR>
I have been away trying to learn how to be a poet. I have spent months looking with the most critical eye at every word I have written and trying to develop.  I was pleased to see the discussion here on critiques. This is a fine site that seems to do a variety of things.  It is a haven for new poets not ready to leap out and get the response from a very critical forum until they are ready, a place for people to just express, share and enjoy.  For those of us who do want a more critical appreciation of their work, I think if we just put up our hands, that could be done. <BR>
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I have been working in a very critical forum and for the serious writer, truly in-depth critical response is a great way to grow. If anyone asks that of me here, that is what they will get with the provisio that they park ego outside before they read what I have to say. Anything I myself post here, that is the level of criticism I would love. <BR>
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Dee, Gala, Kevin guppy and so many others, nice to see your work again.<BR>
<BR>
tok
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From: Elaina<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Ali~ Even sick you are wonderful.  I really enjoyed 'The Obvious' because right now I feel that I don't need to say anything for him to know.<BR>
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me aka niki~ I really loved 'A Friend of More?' we all feel that way just remember, it won't be the last time you feel it.<BR>
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xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: Jenna Holland ([email-masked])<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Michael- Thanks for the compliments on "Saving Face"<BR>
<BR>
-Jenna-
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From: lydia kid 19<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

I love the pomes I'm 15 and I feel the same some of these people feel<BR>
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    well Thank you that is all for now
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From: deevaa<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Gala -- way to go.... congrats!! Please send me a copy of the work on Cassandra, maybe now I've knocked one painting off this year the next will be easier.<BR>
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Toks, I've always loved your work ... it stands up to in depth analysis well I'm sure.... on that note, I'm interested if anyone else stands with Michael on my piece "tail spin mode" ... he says too many metaphors.  My own personal favourite that I wrote so far this month is "I want him to come in the summer time" and I wondered if that had so much of a 'kiwi' flavour to it.<BR>
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I've been writing in an online diary/journal, alot of random thoughts not all public, not all private, it is interesting because often my poetry has come from much longer posts in that, and  that is exactly what happened with 'tail spin mode".<BR>
<BR>
I wrote a 4 paragraph journal entry on discovering that a comment that my lover had written about me had been erased, and how it really hurt when I discovered it was gone, then later that day I took that entry and turned it into a poem, I didn't think it was a great poem, but I enjoyed the process.<BR>
<BR>
dee
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From: Toklas<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

gala, <BR>
Mega Congrats to you! I would love to see it once they have your work up!
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From: Elaina<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Ali~ I loved 'Like Nothing Else' I just really liked it!!!<BR>
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xoxo<BR>
elaina
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From: me aka niki<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

 2 Ali~ I loved your last poem<BR>
Especially the end!<BR>
So true..<BR>

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From: Michael (dee-lighted)<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Dee ~ I made that comment not because I don't like the poem, but because I had my english teacher "rip me a new one" in my first papers when I'd use 5 different metaphors in a paper, and lavish praise when I used 2 metaphors that fishtailed together. So it's more a -- that's what I was brought up to believe thing. I dunno, sometimes I try writing poems other ways and sometimes I like them better that way and other times no. <BR>
<BR>
I have a hard time making "technical" comments on people's poems because I don't want to hurt any feelings and I also wonder how much of what I see is my subjective opinion and how much is generally good commentary. <BR>
<BR>
I think I can some potential as a poet, but I'm not real confident in any skill as a critic. :-)<BR>
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Anyway Dee, I do love your work.
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From: B.K.<BR>
Date: 10 January 2001<P>

Jack: Just wanted to wish you a safe trip and hurry back as we will miss you a lot.<BR>
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bk 
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