TaintedOne - I enjoyed “En France” and Gala - “Sweetheart Dance In McConnell Park” is a great scene and written beautifully! Violet - “his morning angel” is very sweet, nicely done.
Language Abuse Alert. I’m not trying to be the grammar Nazi (no soup for you!), but since this is a writer’s message board and we all make mistakes - there’s one writing booboo that I’ve seen happen over and over again in the last 2 to 3 years since I’ve come here to read. I figure most of us here are open to self-improvement, especially when it comes to our words. So... here’s one common mistake I’d like to mention, let’s make it two:
First, the word “its” versus the word “it’s.” “It’s” means literally “it is” or “it has” – that’s all. It’s not like “Sam’s” or “Jason’s” – It can only mean “it is” or “it has.” It is a nice day. (It’s a nice day). The only reason this one should ever be messed up is in a typo. The word “its” denotes possession and doesn’t need an apostrophe to do it. Its fur. Its blossom. Its softness. I can see how the two are confused, since we’re taught that a noun that ends with an apostrophe-s ('s) is a possessive. Just remember every time you see the word “it’s” that it is (it’s) always a contraction for two words. http://www.cs.washington.edu/homes/csk/its.html
Confusion II. Writing “breath” when we mean to say “breathe” – I’m not going to pull out my spelling-bee boots on this one, but do try looking it up if you’re not sure. The words are similar but don’t sound alike, nor do they mean the same thing. http://www.geocities.com/cabbmain/workshop2.html I don’t know everything (we all knew that) and I don’t want to know everything, but I hope this helps. Anyone want to talk about “your/you’re” or the word [sic] “alot”?
"Most books aren't rejected because the stories are bad. They're rejected because they're not ready to read. In short, minor stuff like typos, grammar, spelling, etc.” – Michael LaRocca.
"We are dumb all over" - Frank Zappa.
me too!
oh! I meant:
"We are dumb all over" - Frank Zappa
"Moreover, I am dumb all over" - Madison
Thanks Madi...
That piece is a DOG to edit....I try...and get caught up in the story, dammit...I gotta meet that guy sometime...
Lisa
hippygreen & Taintedone~A compliment coming from two writers I admire means a lot to me..thanks. "Wake Up Call" started off as a prose piece with a happy ending, but in the process of writing it I ended up with what it is now. Perhaps it's better this way.
Madison
Its all good. ;-)
Take care and all that wishful stuff
-Jon