Ali- I really loved, All That Matters. I can relate.
Does it ever bother any of you that things could always be worse and things could always be better, no matter how much we think the situation moves, it's still right down the middle, because it can ALWAYS be worse and ALWAYS be better?
Just a thought.
To Ali ~ Thank you for the comment dated July 5 - on "Reason to Love Darkness" - you are always so encouraging ! ! !
To Violet ~ Thanks for your words of support on 7/5/01.
*Sigh
To Pepper ~ "Floating Thru the Dark" - I really liked your references to feelings of flying, floating, and swimming -
You are so right about those feelings - Great Job ! ! !
To Angieubaldo ~ "Well" was WELL written - Kinda Sad -
but I do appreciate your ability to say so much in so
few words - Excellent ! !
To Wistful ~ OUCH ! ! ! (My own special word to describe things that I really like) *Wink - You have managed to capture that special anxious faint-like feeling just before a kiss has been consummated..... BRAVO ! ! !
To Shayan73 ~ "Love Again" - Questions after loss, that so many people have to ask themselves - Well done - thanks for sharing....
~Harem~
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To Wistful ~ "Prelude to Each Kiss" - was the poem that I previously commented upon..... Wow - this was hot !!! ... right on the spot.... You captured that wonderfully anxious moment one feels - before the kissing begins - OUCH....
To Stevr ~ "Exploring" was very thought provoking ! ! !
I especially liked the ending "Often when one goes out exploring, they lose what they have already discovered."
So so true.... reminds me of a story that I was told when I was very little - of a dog who had a huge luscious bone - and seemed satisfied with it, until one day he saw his own reflection in a lake - thinking it to be another dog - he began to desire the other dog's bone - So he let go of his, in order to snatch the bone away from the dog in the lake - only to lose the one he had, as it fell to the bottom of the lake - and he wound up with nothing.....
Thanks for sharing these with us ! ! !
~Harem~
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To luce_bruffell ~ I loved the flowing tempo of "A Battle".
To Tanqueray Cowboy ~ "Pictures" - Was Wonderful ! ! !
I could sense your deep feelings.... I have been there also, and have pictures from long ago - that I cannot bring myself to part with - Perhaps there is nothing wrong with keeping - what was once a very important part of your life....
Thanks for sharing - I really enjoyed it ! ! !
To Chris W ~ "Fate's Good Grace" - Was absolutely beautiful ! ! ! Your words floated me - and I like that !
BRAVO - Looking forward to more.....
~Harem~
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Elaina~ Love, love, love your quotes!!!
Love and serenity, Ali
Elaina~ Glad you liked! =) =) =)
Love and trust, Ali
To Violet ~ "RED" - Do NOT apologize for rhyming ! ! !
This was great - I LOVED it ! ! ! The words and phrases you chose and the beat was Superb ! ! !
To untamed bird ~ "Love Avenged" - was well written - but I sense some seethingly negative feelings here ...oil,tar,cement,darkness,revenge,tombs, VERY DEEP...
You are very intense ! ! !
Your way with words - is astounding....
BRAVO...
To galer ~ "Stranger" was erotically arousing... OUCH !
To Ali ~ "All That Matters" - was profoundly beautiful !!
You express your inner feelings so well .....
To Wistful ~ "Reflections" - was so humorous but painfully true - You did a great job - showing - the way that other people see things, or see us - can be quite different from our own viewpoints - thanks for making us think ! !
To Raven ~ "Deeper" - made me sweat - Oh la oui !! I wish it were me - *giggle
~Harem~
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To Elaina ~ (blue sky to your clouds) ~
"Until Forever Fades Away "
was Liltingly Lovely ! ! !
To Michael T ~ "Differential" - Very Amusing and Witty !!!
To Zerch ~ Your submissions have been very enjoyable...
"A Toast" - was not only written extremely well, but
handled a most touchy subject with magnificent tact. A thought provoking piece showing the pitfalls of falling in love too easily - or too fast - CAUTION ! ! ! BRAVO !
To Greysky ~ "Sigh" - I can feel your tenderness.... I really can !! Your writing continues to be amazing....
To B.K. ~ "Reflected by Two" - Your talent really shows here..... You said so much with so little ! ! Excellent...
~Harem~
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Ali~ thank's for you comment on Straw. Ice Cream. :-)
Harem~ I'm glad you liked 'RED' :-)
I love all the great Haiku stuff you all have been posting!
Keep up all of the beautiful submissions! :-)
BK~ Roller Coaster Kissing .... I loved the whimscal feel....great work Darlin'!
Madison~ Wow.....your writing just gets tighter and better all the time. I loved all yourr latest...Brava!
***I've not been able to read a lot here lately, so please forgive the great ones I have not mentioned yet. I'll get back in the groove soon.....
terry
To Flash ~ "Senseless" - reminds me of an old song - "All of Me - why not take all of me - take my lips, i'll never use them, take my arms - i'll only lose them, etc " - I know I have screwed it up - but you get the idea...
Good Job ! ! !
To B.K. ~ "Deeply Twisted Love" - FANTASTIC !!! -
Reminded me of when I used to see names carved on a tree with the heart and arrow - and how I used to wonder if they were still together....
To greysky ~ "RAVAGE" - WOW - What can I say ? ? ?
except - I would love to meet the likes of you in a dark alley - You can rape me with your words, anytime...
*giggle (saved by the giggle).... *Wink
To Untamed Bird ~ "Make Me" is both CUTE and CREATIVE...
To Zerch ~ "Two Simple Questions" - Definitely a 'Free Flowing Journey for the Heart' - Your writing is unique !!
To Deevaa ~ "Getting Ready" and "Come Here" are terribly erotic - Your paintings are MAGNIFICENT !!! You seem to have captured 'R' and 'X' rated aura with PG paint....
These two are my favorites so far.... You just keep getting better and better.... WOW
To Flash ~ "FAR" short but to the point! It's nice when you can feel so close to someone, even when they are not present.... good job ...
To Dragonfleyes ~ "Barren Skin" was AWESOME - *Sigh
To Kalea1969 ~ I loved the metaphor in "SUNBURN" - how someone who brings light and brightness into your life, can also burn you good !!! - ALSO -
"CARESS MY SOUL" - read like an erotic diary - GREAT!!
To ~*Truelies*~ - "THAT SCAR" , So many skeletons in each closet - baggage from the past - we will never know if someone doesn't want to talk about it. really made me think- I love the way it looked and read - thanks !
To h ~ "RED MOON" - OUCH !! I loved it.... I really did..
While reading it - I was the wind touching your rough face.... the wet waves beneath your feet.... and COULD feel your breath in my mouth - DOUBLE OUCH !! REMARKABLE !!!
To Galadrial ~ "Love Sounds" was GREAT - BUT
"IN LOVE WITH THE WORDS" was ABSOLUTELY BREATH-TAKING !!
it was such pleasure to read - like floating effortlessly thru a waltz - but with so much meaning - HOW TRUE - that love should be more than words - so much more !!!
You are one VERY talented lady !!!
Thanks Sequeen and dev0n for the welcome back. Sad to say, Im still a little too busy to be my "regular" self. Ahhh... I feel like such an outsider (or newbie... not that that is a bad thing :o)) Keep Writing
Lots of Love,
-Jenna-
Hi, thanx for the comment. I agree that all of my poems seem to rhyme, all in all I have written about 27 poems, the majority of them not rhyming. To be honest though, I think people relate to poems more when they are rythmic, otherwise, people lose track and understanding of the poem. They rhyme by chance more than anything, I get across how I was feeling at a particular time in my life using rhyme. The rhyming sequence is representative of my life, as it is always constantly on the go, if my poem didnt rhyme, it simply wouldnt be an image of the way I was feeling at that time. Check out my newest addition, cheers
Deep Luce sea
To Smiling Kat ~ "How My Heart Works" is DELIGHTFUL !!
and so you are a Smiling-type person... and it shows in your writing......
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Du'Doll---
I read "Not Coming". I Guess that was probobly what you called me about the other day. I'll try getting in touch with you sometime over the next couple of days. I think we need to talk! See ya, Hot Tomato!!!
Zero #1---
Hey stranger! Welcome back to the Blender! I love your poem "Still Life Piano". I think I told you a long time ago that you are an excellent writer. I really meant it! It's good to see that you're taking a little time to express yourself again. Keep it up!!
Harem---
Thanks sooo much!!!! ;)
TJ!!
I have written a new poem that I desperatly want your opinion on, please, sa what you really think, but this is one of the truset poems I have ever wrote, n it means so much to me, so dont be brutal!! go check it out hun!! its called
"I MISS YOUR EVERYTHING"
whatcha think?!
deep luce sea
Carmen!!! Very insightful!! Like your work, what you think of mine, Im a new person to all this n I want to know what ppl think, cheers!!
deep luce sea
Terry~ Glad to see you're back around!!! Missed you, dearie!
Love and smiles, Ali
thank you terry, B.K., scqueen (? ha, or was that a thanks a lot, now I don't want to come to Texas? - hehe, the 104 degrees wasn't in Tx! it was in some vague Oklahomalocation) and ~*Truelies*~, I really appreciate hearing such gracious feedback. I think it somehow helps to keep the motivation alive. Hey, almost forgot to tell you, I lost my job today! woohoo! going to go celebrate : )
Harem; Thank you so much, you always have such a way with words and compliments that are always very encouraging to us all.
Madison; Congratulations on your job loss, ha, last time that happened to me I wrote some of my best poems ha ha. Guess it gave me more time for erotic thought ha ha.
TERRY! Darlin, where you been?? I need your head to bounce off of, you know how much you have always inspired me. Get in here and write for us again.
bk
rainh20; I loved both poems, but 'Dysfuntion,' was my favorite, please write more for us.
bk
luce_bruffell ~
I'm so glad that you didn't take offense to my comments! How refreshing to be able to provide what someone asks for without retribution! I read the new poem and I liked it very much. To me the rythm was more natural and appealing. And of course, rythm IS different than rhyme. One thing I tend to do when writing, is to "free-fall" write, which is what I suggested you try (in my other comment). I do that and then am sure to spend a while working out the bugs...refining it. I'll read it out loud a million times...change things a bit, be sure the rythm, grammar, ideas are all there and good. It makes for a fine finished product (even then I don't call it close to perfect). I guess that is why I don't submit many poems any more. I don't have as much time to work on them this way, and I'd rather have one really good one, than 15 sloppy ones. (though sometimes I just can't wait to get one on the Blender!!) Anyway, some of the things I liked best about your poem were the similies and metaphors. For example; "visable to my waterfall eyes"...what a line!! And this one... "Banish the longing of one single kiss/Demolish the addiction of your touch"...it says so much for the way we feel when we want someone desperately. And the line about 'haunt my sterilized soul', I liked that idea alot- I think I have a sterilized soul! Hahahaha!! This line..."Every memory of us together laughs in my face" really brought stuff back to me. It is so true how my memories of my ex-husband just laugh in my face. You hit that one on the head for me! So.............sorry I rambled on so much. You're fun to talk about poetry with because you know how to take comments. Thanks for being you!
-Teej
rainh2o~ I like your work...Keep posting!
Love and light, Ali