Unchained~ 'In these moments' was beautifully written...it nearly broke my heart...
Love and light, Ali
To Unchained ~
In these moments
I really liked this one !!!
I notice a lot of writers frown upon verse that rhymes....
and I myself try to avoid it.... (as I am addicted to it)..
But Your writing here, made me realize why I find myself so attracted to rhyming poems.... and why some of my friends, prefer them also....
Ok.... here is the bottom line....
A poem that rhymes makes one feel like they are listening to music (I love music)....
And so you have, not only the words, but the beautiful lilting feeling of a melody -
If the poem is written well, with a good tempo and delightful rhyming schemes -
Then for me... it is like taking a drug.....
I start to float.... and come away from the poem, feeling high !!!!
And, so my friend - Your poem here, drugged me so well !!!
Leaving me floating and smiling....
Yet also left me with words of wisdom to think about...
BRAVO !!
~Harem~
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To highpriestess~
Thank you for your welcome comment on Only an Angel ! ! !
I really appreciated it~
*wink
~Harem~
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2 Harem~ Wow...i'm speechless
I truly loved "damaged beyond repair" Some days I can relate
And I'm so sorry
the other poem was also gr8
good job
2 Elaina~ "fruitless" hhaha I really liked it
nice work;)
Lots-a-luv
Niki
Harem~
"Damaged Beyond Repair" was wonderful. I feel like you crawled inside my head and wrote down what I am thinking every time a new relationship heads my way - Bravo! Keep writing because you my friend have quite a talent! :0)
-Isabella
Hey All! *smiles*
After reading one of Harem's comments, I just wanted to clarify (incase anyone was wondering or thinking I'm a Rhyme Nazi)...a while back I suggested to one submitter here that his rhyming poem seemed a bit forced, (ie: words that did not really 'belong' or did not convey any real meaning, were used in the poem simply because they rhymed with the words used before them) and I implied that often times a poem's flow or emotion can be lost when a poet attempts to 'rhyme-at-all-cost'. Just for the record, I have no aversion or objection to poems that rhyme, as long as it is done with skill and intelligence. Anyway, not a big deal, but Thanks for listening! *stepping down from the soap box and looking furtively about for stones lobbed in my general direction...* LOL!!
-Teej
To TJHolland ~
I know exactly what you mean....
When you are NOT limited to rhyming words, it gives you so much more freedom to express yourself in writing....
And I do agree, that when you use words, which really do not fit the feeling, but which were chosen, merely to complete the rhyme... can make the poem sound simply awful....
It takes tremendous talent, to be able to produce a poem that rhymes, in a flowing manner, and yet, not sacrifice
the feeling one is desiring to express.
I truly believe that feelings are captured more passionately when one is not limited to rhyming words....
But, I still love to be put into a trance with the well written, tintillating tempo of rhyming verse...
You notice, I said, "well written".... because if talent is not used - it becomes a choppy shamble, which embarasses even the reader....
Woooo..... *giggle
~Harem~
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To Isabella Svenska ~
Thank you so much for your comment on Damaged Beyond Repair .
It is comforting to know that I am not alone in this dilemma.
Thanks for sharing !!
Also, thank you for your kind comments !!! *Sigh
To Me aka Niki ~
I appreciate you reading my prose !!!
And thank you for taking the time to give me words of encouragement...
It meant a lot to me !!
~Harem~
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Harem
I love your two poems, especially Fearing Love. I am right there. I've been there for as long as I can remember. I always felt that you can't be hurt if you don't let anyone get near to you. I was wrong. I was only hurting myself. I have found love now, and oh wow! All I can say is I was a fool, and didn't know what I was missing!
Du'Doll
lol ah well so much fer a rhyme......