Spaded,
Your revised version is much better.
It makes a little more sense and it's easier to read.
I'M GUILTY
If falling in love means that I thought I found someone that made me feel a little less lonely . . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means that I thought I found someone that I could grow old with . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means that I found someone that I can accept his faults and love him unconditionally . . . . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means that I thought I found someone that accepted my faults and loved me unconditionally . . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means just that I could spend a week alone with someone without having the feeling that I want to strangle him or that he wants to strangle me . . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means that I have finally found someone that understands me and still stands beside me through thick and thin . . . . . then I'm guilty.
If falling in love means that I have someone in my life that is worth keeping . . . . . then I'm guilty.
I still love that man I thought I fell in love with. I miss him and wish that he was still here. Guess I might have fallen in love with a mirage . . . . you know, a figment of my imagination . . . . . I'm not certain, but think that he is still there . . . . . . in there somewhere.
If you ever meet him, could you please tell him that I'm still here waiting for him to sweep me off my feet? If you do see him, could you please convey to him how much I still do love him and want him? If you see him before I do, could you please let him know that I've never loved anyone else like I've loved him. Also, could you please tell him that I've spent a lot of time figuring out what I want in a man and what I don't want . . . . and that the man I know I love is that man. I know that he really wants to be . . . . really down deep . . . . . wants someone that would love him and be loyal to him, like me. He knows he could have his heaven on earth with me.
Please let him know that even though time might pass and others might come and go . . . . what really matters is that love can heal any wound, if you only let it.
A. Perkins – Detour – “Your crooked darkness still floods the corners of my soul” – Wow… Amazing…
Spaded - **revised** could you catch all that? – I really like this
Chances are – why goodbye? It’s such a sad bad word. I hate goodbye and God bless and people asking you to take care and leaving because they do that knowing they wont be there to take care of you instead. What they really mean is take care of yourself because I wont be there to take care of you. Do I make sense? Probably not, but why goodbye?
And why “I may visit though you won’t see me”?
Always,
Star of David*
thnx star of david, yea, was quite depressing. fits my mood.. ;-P
And I take this opportunity as a plug for a Southern friend who is about to come out with his first book of Poetry...
Tony Spivey is a remarkable poet,{{http://www2.coastalnet.com/~g7h4s4nb/index.html}}and this is his current link. Any day now, Iriswhite Publications will be releasing his first book of poetry, called Covered Ground.
Tony is remearkably diverse, and works absolute magic with words. He is a much honored and welcome member of The Respite, and I encourage you to visit his site, and purchase the book when it becomes available. I truly believe he will be hailed as the vanguard of poetry for the new Southern school in years to come.
If the link doesn't work, hit my site the Respite, and look for work under the nick Poetdude...
Star of David, Thank you very much.
Wordley - Baby Blue?...Screw You!!! - Excellent! Good to see ya back Grasshopper!
Gala~ When will your contest results be up? And what's the next contest about? You're the best. ~Vi
Hey Chances, you just got here where are you going???
bk
B.K.: Always straight to the point, eloquent and full of heart. Thank you as always for sharing your art.
Daniela; Thank you so much. Welcome to the blender and wow a front page pick already. Way to go!
As I always say, if you can't get them right between the eyes, aim for the heart..ha if that doesn't work, aim lower.hahahahahha
bk
Jon – Sorry? – I like it a lot and it rings so right and true in a simple straightforward sad way... Got me thinking for quite some time...