Beloved ~ It's good you are so open but please fear God .Please don't hurt a person who loves you so much.
Beloved~ There is something known as compassion . If you can't show compassion to a fellow human being now then it's going to be tough later on in your life. What will you do when you grow old? Who will be there for you. Now you may look beautiful or whatever. So all the men or the boys will hang around you. But you need to devote atleast a little space for love. Money isn't everything in life. There is life beyond money. It sounds weird when people say that Money is everything. Anyways hope you recover soon from this money madness and become a normal soft and loving person.
Amen
Athena - Hi. I visited your site, to read more of your poetry. I noticed on your poetry page the Hilary Price work Kirk posted under a different title without crediting the author?
Athena - I was going to say I like the work you've posted here. That's the problem with instances of plagiarism - now no one will be sure if it's your own work. It's a stupid mistake to make.
Beloved~life is a merry go round...what goes around comes around...I am so sorry that your day will come....you still have a chance to change it all...freewill...your choice
a question was posed a few days back about 'how do you write'...
I RARELY rewrite anything. Occasionally I will change a word here as I goabout posting something, and it is only because something doesn't read quite right.
This is how I write:
I carry around a miniature composition book (less than a buck at Wal-Mart), which works well since most of what I write is very short. Most of what I write has always been written upon a little page (I have finally graduated from post-it notes! Well, not completely). Often I will compose a poem while sitting at the 'puter (since most of my time is spent in front of one). It's most often in this setting that I will jot down an ill-formed idea that is not quite a poem (since being at the computer usually means there are distractions, such as work!). Occasionally I will jot down an ill-formed idea in the little book, but usually poems spring forth whole from my little peanut brain.
I always try to keep my eyes and ears open to things that lend themselves to poetic language. It's only when I have these little ill-formed ideas that I do much re-writing. That is because a single metaphor or image generally does not make a good poem. As far as heavy editing goes, I have always looked at poems as emotional snapshots, and that is the main reason I don't go back and fiddle with something I have written. I don't play around with photographic images much either. I want to see things exactly as they were when I made the snapshot (which is precisely why I put a date on everything). I am no longer in the same place, literally. Occasionally I will read something a couple of years old and it will move me to frame a different poem around the same idea or an image from thaty previous work, but that is not the same as a rewrite.
However, I have been so UNinspired lately (I've been ill and working overtime) that I am beginning to rethink that policy... I have a ton of half-assed poems that could really use a good brush-up.
Anyway, that's my story and I'm sticking to it!
Some great answers to my little question. How do you write?
Madison got a great page for her site and wow what an answer.
Mine are written to and for him. It has to be a free-flow and like Kev said has a lot to to with where I am at the time. I don't write much angry poetry or anything unloving and I think if he told me to get lost, or that he had just run away with my best friend today I would ever turn that into any kind of he done me wrong poetry as I call it ha. Not that you haven't the right to write like that, everyone has all the right, it's just me, I could never do it.
I beg for an edit key all the time but Kirk doesn't want to see people come in and wipe out their accounts and I respect that. I post and five seconds later find something I can change about it. But it's better left raw as thats how it came. I can change it all I want on Xanga and when I do I find if I change it too much it suddenly is not in the same rhythm that I wrote it in and the mood of the poem is broken.
I love hearing how you all write...who's next to tell us?
bk
I am new here! I hope to meet some new people!
:) ps I am from Indiana
splatipus: Thanks for welcoming me!
Liz: It's great to have someone understand exactly what you mean.
Chances: Retail Therapy - I could use a day like that
aparajita: loved whispers!
j.knipp: 50 Things I love about S. - I hope "S" read this cause it's beautiful
courtney: Why: I've been there myself
Rennie... you are welcome! thanks for the mention.
thanks dana for the encouragement!
Dana~I just wanted to say that I've been reading all of your submissions and I have enjoyed them all.
Take care
-Jon
Welcome to all the new poets in new subs! ..... Rennie
Kevin~ I've always been a fan of yours, but this one is going to be a favorite for the images it gives me: climbing -- thanks ..... Rennie
Aparajita~ Letting go...beautiful
somedaysoon~ Maybenot...touching
Jim~ infertile soil...warming (thank you baby)
Kev~ lengua...as always...wow
Jknipp~ 50 things I love about S...I love it
chances~ If you cant's see me...as always great (I feel invisible right now)
willtobe1~ delicate...beautiful
wolfscreamer~ I love you...awesome
elocution~ Tell Me....I loved it
athena~ Walls...beautiful...thank you
poetic wheels~ Her ghost...beautiful
lilla~ It Rains on Summer...awesome
Rennie~ First consider his loss...awesome as always...thank you
jon~ Contacts...as always...I loved it
Thank you all for sharing....I hope I have not offended anyone if I missed you...just so many new writings...all are wonderful...thank you all
I've become remiss in my responses here, I'm afraid. All apologies.
TJ> You can save it to wherever you wish, darlin'. You know of what I ask, and I am assured you'll do so. I'm honored you think enough of it to hold it personally.
Rennie> As always, you are most kind and gracious to me. I've been writing so much lately that I sometimes fear I might lose my edge, but apparently that hasn't been the case. Here's to quality and quantity welded together for as long as the muse can stand.
scqueen> Whitney, thank you as always. The genesis of that particular piece is an interesting one, and thus my preface as to how *I* write, for Now That's Entertainment is one of the best examples of my process.
This piece was originally entitled Requiem, and its subject matter covered the end of a relationship on bad terms and the fallout most of us know all too well. As I composed the first six lines, which uses various music-based imagery to set the tone for the rest of the poem, I realized that my preference for the next stanza would not fit in with the first one, so I changed the title to Feedback, again alluding to the sonic basis of the first group of lines and also covering an alternate usage of the word "feedback", in this case as response to an inquiry.
The second stanza deals with a consistent sore in some of the longer-term relationships I've experienced-attempting to correct the damage in lovers from their past. The theme is evident in some of the terms used-"Jigsaw women", "rearranged honey" and "shredded psyche". The binding thread of the poem shifts from musical allusion to one of a "jack-of-all-trades" mentality-the narrator is covering his experience in using patient sensuality to gently repair past wrongs from others. But, in lines 11 and 12, he acknowledges that his efforts are actually more of a stopgap fixative, as he makes note of maintenance and warranties. He realizes he cannot truly "rebuild" anything, only attempt to prevent a complete breakdown as an interim solution.
The third stanza goes from his realization to a desire to escape from a bad situation, weighing his options and trying to decide where he might go instead of remaining behind to clean up yet another mess. "Unknown in front of me, shambles in the rear; this is not as difficult as I might believe,"-that is his realization after all, that anything is preferable to where he is now, no matter the destination, and his decision already having been made for him. So he imagines what it might be like to drive away from an explosion just in the nick of time, evading villians in a cloud of dust and smoke. Here the Hollywood imagery serves as balance to the real life necessity of leaving-do it on your terms with no anchorage to stop you before the entire consequence of collapse takes you down along with it. In re-reading what I had written, I realized that I had touched upon two large components of our daily escapes-music and film, which serve as entertainment for the masses to ease the tensions of everyday struggles. I thought to myself "now that's entertaining" and thus a title came about from the work. The shift from titles and the flow of the work show how one idea or several are tied together on the fly to compose some of my works, and there you have an insight as to how I myself compose in some cases.
CryingShame58> What else can I say but thank you, ma'am. You've been so laudatory and gracious of my writings that I can't really say anything to honor such praise except to extend my thanks to you and promise that I will always set them forth with the same energy always. And if I ever publish anything, I'll make sure you get one of the first copies dedicated to you and your appreciations.
aparajita> Thank you for the feedback. The blues have been a part of my writing and part of my inspiration for some time now, and the music strikes and inspires me off and on. My love for and fascination with south Louisiana and the Delta lands where it all emerged from has given me some of the finest ideas for my works, and I try to honor the cheerful legacy of Cajuns and the gritty wisdom of the people there as best as possible.
Kirk> Thank you for placing Heartbreakers and Hellraisers as one of the front page picks for March. I'm honored to be included among such bright and capable company.
Blessings to all of you for a safe weekend and happy times always.
willtobe1~
How wonderful it is for you to grace up with your presence again! *smile* I enjoyed reading Delicate! Well written, my dear. :)
Love and silent grace, Ali
Paul~ Thank you. And, thanks for the explanations on your latest in comments. It is a treat to read a writer's views on a work. I once had a professor who said I worked him far too hard with dictionary, and in the library reference sections in having to go back to dig out all I packed in some pieces. I had great teachers and inspiration as I saw it. What amazed me was that he wanted to dig as much of the meaning(s) out as possible. I had often written just with the hope that someone else could take what I wrote and apply it to themselves meaningfully somehow if what I had written wasn't just for the purpose of venting. I think it hard to sit and write in one or several paragraphs on why and how we write all we do, but fascinating to read these as each poet cares to share. Thanks! ..... Rennie
I would like to thank
Rennie Lorca
LadyinWaiting
Dana
And
Rhetoric
for their compliments.
Moving On
I know about this lulu, and you tell it very well. Thanks.
Jim
Beloved ~ Your writing was quite shocking. I got to accept it. How could you pretend so much as though nothing had happened. Anyways hope you don't continue this way just for material needs.
God Bless.
Ladyinwaiting ~ I am one big fan of yours. I love your writing. Keep up the good work.