Baby Rose, about Your Winter:
"Now my skin too is settled
with a thin sheet of ice,
covered in your winter,
a frosted whisper,
a frigid gaze,
your hand could freeze the sun.
Oh, bind me in your golden threads once more,
sweep me in pools of warm silver dipped stars."
*pupils dilate* holy freakin crap. the metaphors in this piece are simple yet elgant. and after this stanza you go to "a hint of warmth...." i think i'm in love. everything you write is so well done. congrats on this one in particular.
Baby Rose, about Words:
"and tell me they were real,
that they weren't just things said to tear my clingy
clothes off and feast upon the heat of my naked flesh."
tear my "clingy clothes", "feast upon..." wow. I really enjoyed those lines. isn't sad the things lust will do? its human nature and all but still, everyones got a brain, anyone out there have a conscience? if your both willing and know exactly what it is before hand no problems with that. but i hate devious sneaky little bastards.....
Ali, about Without:
I really love the contrast of the first and second stanza. the first seems more casual, almost like the first verse is you talking to the subject of the work. the second stanza is more like your thoughts or your "meditation on distance", or perhaps the conclusions you've drawn from said meditation. i really really enjoyed this one. thankyou for posting this.
hairdiva, about Relief, In the Form of Absence:
I have never read CJ king, but thanks to your submission i think i may pick up something when i go to the bookstore next. thankya.
rennielorca, about BULLRIDERS AND SUCH:
this made me smile, and smirk. lovely little piece. well done on the rhyming as well, its not often that a work can rhyme and sound natural. nicely done.
Ali, about We and One:
oh my. this is wonderful. you are a wonderful writer. every couple lines you always throw a punch, "pseudo-sainted passion" "incendiary destiny" to name a couple. thankyou for sharing this, and all your works.
distant moon, about Coup D'etat:
ooh, i missed this somehow before. quite glad i found it though. last four lines were a perfect finish.
aparajita, about afflicted:
y'know, one good thing about not being on here for a while is that instead of having to wait a couple weeks or month for a work from you i can see a bunch at once. started to look through some of your stuff i missed. this made ME ache. I hate and love remembering whats been lost at the same time. lovely alliteration to start this too.
Marshall~
You are so sweet; I am very glad that you liked both those pieces. Truly made my morning. I've had quite a bit of inspiration, lately...
Judging by your comments...I'm wondering, are you an English major? It seems like you've studied some lit. I'm just curious. :-)
By the by, everyone...I won't have internet access for a few days. But I'll check in as soon as I can. :-)
Blessed 23, I am in love with the words that you write, I have felt a connection with them ever since the first piece that I read. You are truly kind and made me smile on the outside and the inside. You have the soul of a poet and I think that it is beautiful, please never ever lose it. I am so glad that you enjoyed the pieces and about "words", yes it is human nature to lust but I am so tired of being led astray by empty promises and being looked at as a twenty five year old piece of you know what. Thank you for realizing how wrong it is to try to make someone believe you feel more for them than being lustfully attracted to them, I am so much more than a body and I wish more people would realize it. I am passionate and full of depth and complication, I am more than just a smooth surface to lie with at night. You
see what I wish most men could see and you make me believe that the days of long ago may be dead but their are still knights in blue jeans and t-shirts who spout sonnets and want to know of real love...
blessed23, about Mercy:
I can't tell you how this makes me ache inside,this reminds me of the lyrics of Kurt Cobain,whom I absolutely love, I can't tell you how happy I am to be able to feel something from someones writing even if it is pain, to be able to feel anything right now is a blessing...
Baby Rose~
We're about the same age...and I understand your desire for something more, for someone seeing beyond your age and looks.
Just wanted to let ya know that you're not alone in those feelings. :-) Of course, it doesn't help that I'm also a hopeless romantic...
hehe
thanks, blessed. when moving on from a long relationship that didn't work it's time to reflect and assess others. helps to impress these on our minds so that we don't make the same mistakes or get the wrong impressions the next time. my best to you in your quest for companionship and love ...... Rennie
Thanks ali your a doll
darwin, about after the deluge. :
This is beautiful, full of such complex and elegantly articulated emotions.
Thank you for sharing this...
:-)
Baby Rose~
Hehe. Don't let it get around--it'll ruin my rep! lol *grin*
Ali I hope that your little kick of inspiration continues. i enjoy reading your work. heres hopin.
and nope, i am no english major. I actually haven't decided for sure yet, But it will either be Psychology or Political science. at the moment I'm leaning towards Poli sci. the only lit i've really gotten to study was in high school and i took english 101 in my first year. which depresses me a little, cause i know there is alot of literature out there that i would love if only i could get my hands on it.
Baby_Rose - Thankyou so much. I am sincerely happy that you enjoy what i write. if even one person enjoys what you write it makes it worth while.
"I am so much more than a body" oh yes, yes you are. and so is everyone else in the world. too bad that many people say that they believe in a soul and yet i find it strange that noone really takes time to find their own or anothers for that matter. hang in there though, there are decent guys out there(I swear! no joke, i actually know a few here or there) have patientce, is the best advice i can give.
aparajita- oops, how rude of me. i somehow forgot to thankyou for your comments. so, thankyou. lol "fluffier" i like how you put that.
rennie- huh, yknow, thats not a bad idea. learn from past mistakes. that probably would have helped me at least once or twice. your welcome btw, and same to you ren, same to you.
marsh... thanks for your kind words. you truly are a gem and i appreciate you for it. the muse is a wily creature, she comes and goes at will and without much provocation. somedays she won't shut up, but i don't have time to pen what she's reciting. along with the 'fluffier' comes early alzheimer's (just kidding, i think it is more stress and too much to do with too little time) so i don't always remember how she said it. at any rate, you flatter me and i thank you for it. i have to admit to you that i thought you might be an english major also. i just write, not even knowing that i am writing "alliteration"... haha. it's been a REALLY REALLY long time since my high school lit class, and college too for that matter. too fun to know i still got it even if i didn't know what to call it!!! hahahahaha. you've made me smile!
it's great to see the board active again!! (guess i won't try to keep it mine... haha!!) and just as sweet to see all the talent, new and old.